Thursday, March 6, 2014

The Beach

 Wind dances on the sand 

Waves roll and tumble on the jagged rocks

Sun gleams brightly on the sea 

 Clouds float peacefully along the skyline

5 comments:

Jane Bosecke said...

Some good imagery here. What if you deleted some of the 'The's at the start of each line? Would that add to the poem?

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Mahana Kotuku said...

I love it MILLIE!!- Pip

Mahana Kotuku said...

Thanks pip😊

Mahana Kotuku said...

I love it Millie
/Meg

Mahana Kotuku said...

I love it Millie
/Meg