tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2371606962689315741.post7417075241119378882..comments2024-01-24T23:38:37.573+13:00Comments on Mahana Kōtuku Blog: The OakJustin Nealhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17888929744653052884noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2371606962689315741.post-48354363296088718552014-03-10T17:39:26.211+13:002014-03-10T17:39:26.211+13:00Thats an awesome poem Christopher. I liked the way...Thats an awesome poem Christopher. I liked the way you shaped the poem . The words and the Shape helped me to imagine an oak tree. MUMMumnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2371606962689315741.post-36677089602148353352014-03-10T11:48:25.252+13:002014-03-10T11:48:25.252+13:00Hi Chris,
I like how you wrote the poem. How you c...Hi Chris,<br />I like how you wrote the poem. How you coloured it to look like an oak-PipMahana Kotukuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00824797729741684472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2371606962689315741.post-75067809327518134512014-03-10T11:27:24.098+13:002014-03-10T11:27:24.098+13:00you wrote leaves twice maybe you could think of an...you wrote leaves twice maybe you could think of another word for leaves<br />but LOVE IT!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2371606962689315741.post-18378962030320246372014-03-10T08:47:31.565+13:002014-03-10T08:47:31.565+13:00Hi Chris
I enjoyed the 'shape' of your po...Hi Chris<br /><br />I enjoyed the 'shape' of your poem. Wow words like 'scrape' and 'cling' add a lot of interest. I LOVE the wobbly staircase image. LOVE IT!<br /><br />Consider your fourth line, "Whilst..." Read the poem again and see if it really adds to it, or if it could be tweaked a little. Let me know what you decide.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com